My revision process during writing is very simple. The first thing I look at are the comments made by my peers. I will look through all the comments they made for simple things such as a word change or incorrect grammar, and change that. After I will change the broader concepts. For example in the examples below, my teacher and writing fellow made a recommendation that I should switch around a paragraph in order for it to make sense. As the document shows I completely changed a paragraph to fit the comments made by my peers in order for it to make sense. The comment made by my peers was to flip the quotes in order for it to make sense with the overall claim I was trying to make. When I did that I changed around my ideas to better match what I was trying to say.

After looking at what my peers and professor has said, I reread my essay again. During this process I will elaborate on ideas that I may feel need more explaining, and I add final touches such as missing citations during a paraphrasing piece of my work. For example I discuss rebellion as an important part of social change. In the first essay I did not elaborate on what rebellion could include, so in the final draft I added an example of how Rosa Parks rebelled against the bus laws, and eventually lead to social change in regards to racism.

Final Draft:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wJGV3_VAL9Kc9G-O4M7RVuF5TuXlmLEQDCqDrvOOvuM/edit

First Draft:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_zvR6ZeReT3-MqbRk3Yp_zd_2ydLahNzzE-RrNztVzw/edit